ACT Question of the Day Explained – March 26, 2014 – English, Wordiness

Today’s ACT question of the day is an English question from the passage about baseball.  We’re asked to fix the underlined part of this sentence (only the first part of which is pasted below, because the final clause doesn’t affect us):

I was a freshman at a university that was located in the Midwest at the time,

There is nothing egregiously wrong with this sentence, but it could be better. Much as “a dog that was not very large” could better be described as a “small dog” for efficiency’s sake, the “university that was located in the Midwest” could better be described as a “midwestern university”. This also takes away the suggestion that the university may have moved, as it is now permanently midwestern and not merely previously located in the Midwest.

The underlined portion only provides description of the university’s location, so choose an answer that provides the same function – not one that throws additional information in to confuse things. C works nicely today.